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Class: 21 Steps to Fog-Free Writing
Publishers and agents reject 99 percent of received manuscripts
after simply glancing at their first chapters. This class shows
why your own manuscript was rejected . . . and how to fix it!
Don McNair, a professional writer and editor for forty years,
discovered the answers years ago while editing a manuscript on
an airplane trip for a public relations client. Months of follow-up
research showed him there were twenty-one problems that “fog
up” a manuscript, diminishing its clarity and power. The big
secret? Remove one or more words from those problem
sentences to make the copy sparkle. He named the solutions to
these problems “The 21 Steps to Fog-Free Writing.”
This course presents those 21 problems and solutions. After
you've finished it you’ll be able to self-edit your work and:
• Eliminate weak verb forms
• Strip away author intrusions
• Identify character filters
• Ban redundancies
• Eliminate foggy phrases
• Correct passive voice sentences
• Slash misused and overused words
• Correct other writing bugaboos.
This class will help you identify and overcome specific, personal
writing challenges. When you apply this new knowledge to your
manuscripts you'll immediately make them more appealing to
editors and agents. And who knows? You may finally become
published!
The class, which costs $30, will be presented in August,
2012. To register, go to WritersOnlineClasses.com.
Class: Editor-Proof That First Chapter
Why did that editor reject your novel?
The sad truth? Editors reject most manuscripts after only
glancing at their first chapter, and seeing mistakes
seemingly lit with neon. This course will help you spot your
own manuscript's problems and--better yet--help you fix
them.
You'll learn how to use strong "hooks"... turn "info
dumps" into sparkling, vital prose... strengthen verbs...
strip away author intrusions... identify crippling character
filters... eliminate foggy phrases... correct passive voice...
and solve numerous other writing bugaboos.
To enroll, you must have finished a manuscript or the first
chapter of a Work In Progress. You'll use it as your
practice field for identifying and resolving your personal
craft mistakes, so you can later apply your new editing
knowledge to the total manuscript. It will become much
more compelling and, hopefully, published!
The Master Class, which costs $55, will be presented . To
register, go to WriterUniv.com. in June, 2012
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| “Don, I have to take the time out from editing my WIP to tell you how much I am enjoying your class. The information you give us is fabulous. I just counted the books I have purchased in the last 12 months dealing with writing. 27! 27 books that have given me less "usable" information than your one class. Thank you- thank you!” Linda Cousine Aliso Viejo, CA |
Linda Cousine
Aliso Viejo, CA
Aliso Viejo, CA
“Don's workshops are the best. His own
writing is so CLEAN, a real pleasure to
read. While some workshops are "about,"
Don's is a "how-to." He shares (1) very
specific techniques to clean up your own
writing and (2) handouts/exercises to
identify your own brand of "fog." I have my
own personalized list of over-used words
and such (developed in one of his
workshops) that I use Word FIND to check
out while editing.
My standard for online workshops is what I
have to show after I've completed the
class. I can promise that Don's classes
are well worth your time and money.”
Rita Van Fleet
Mobile, AL
writing is so CLEAN, a real pleasure to
read. While some workshops are "about,"
Don's is a "how-to." He shares (1) very
specific techniques to clean up your own
writing and (2) handouts/exercises to
identify your own brand of "fog." I have my
own personalized list of over-used words
and such (developed in one of his
workshops) that I use Word FIND to check
out while editing.
My standard for online workshops is what I
have to show after I've completed the
class. I can promise that Don's classes
are well worth your time and money.”
Rita Van Fleet
Mobile, AL
“I printed out your lessons and read
them at bedtime. I have already made
several edits to my wip based on the
information in your lessons. I have
taken several online writing classes,
and this is one of my favorites. I like
your style!”
Rita Garcia
Diamond Bar, CA
them at bedtime. I have already made
several edits to my wip based on the
information in your lessons. I have
taken several online writing classes,
and this is one of my favorites. I like
your style!”
Rita Garcia
Diamond Bar, CA
“I've been a lurker in this class-doing the
lessons at night. Already I'm looking at
my writing with a better editing eye. I like
the format of the class and the fun.”
Karen Anderson
Durham, NC
lessons at night. Already I'm looking at
my writing with a better editing eye. I like
the format of the class and the fun.”
Karen Anderson
Durham, NC
“I loved the course, and learned a lot about editing
my own work. I edited the first 3 chapters of my WIP,
and they're a lot tighter (and shorter). I liked the
format, the assignments and being able to correct my
work. Thanks for a great course that definitely
improved my WIP and, hopefully, future books.”
Beverley Bateman,
Kelowna, BC, Canada
my own work. I edited the first 3 chapters of my WIP,
and they're a lot tighter (and shorter). I liked the
format, the assignments and being able to correct my
work. Thanks for a great course that definitely
improved my WIP and, hopefully, future books.”
Beverley Bateman,
Kelowna, BC, Canada
“Don looked at something I'd written a couple of years
ago, and in just a few minutes I learned more about
editing from him than I had in my many years of
classes, lectures and workshops. Skills can definitely be
improved, and Don has proven it. You can't go wrong
with his classes!”
Allison Knight
Fairhope, AL
ago, and in just a few minutes I learned more about
editing from him than I had in my many years of
classes, lectures and workshops. Skills can definitely be
improved, and Don has proven it. You can't go wrong
with his classes!”
Allison Knight
Fairhope, AL
“I learned a lot from your class. I've
deleted about 2,000 words from my
WIP! I never realized how much I
overused ‘that,’ ‘just,’ and ‘ing' so
THANK YOU!!!”
Casey Crow
Mobile, AL
deleted about 2,000 words from my
WIP! I never realized how much I
overused ‘that,’ ‘just,’ and ‘ing' so
THANK YOU!!!”
Casey Crow
Mobile, AL
